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Introduction to Organization

Paragraph without proper organization:

The frog jumped onto the lily pad. The creek ran through the wooded section of the farm. The children enjoyed the view. Frogs croaked. The wind rustled in the trees. The red sun set quickly disappearing over the horizon. The morning sun was hot. The melting snow rambled down from the mountains into the creek.

These are a group of sentences apparently, but not clearly, connected. There is no proper organization: no topic sentence and no unity and coherence.

Introduction to Organization

Paragraph revised with proper organization.

The children enjoyed the beautiful view. The melting snow rambled down from the mountains in the creek which ran through the wooded section of the farm. A frog jumped onto a lily pad and croaked lazily in the hot morning sun as the wind rustled in the trees. In the evening, the red sun set quickly disappearing over the horizon.

Now, there is a clear connection between the sentences which focus on a description.